Lost in the Blue Funk- Jacobite's Shows (Poetry: Day 3)
Some days are filled with clouds,
Making everything appear scary.
Terror sailing the wind,
Danger at its best.
Days my hope seems not found,
Drown by fears while hope tarry.
Tension sailing the wind,
Danger at its best.
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This day feels longer than it should,
I only know this to happen in tales of fairy.
Horror gliding the field,
Danger at its best.
A day filled tears gushing like flood,
Laughter, joy and happiness; all seems buried.
Trepidation gliding the field,
Danger at its best.
PROLOGUE
This piece captures the heart of a youth besieged by fear...
Special Note:
This poetry is for personal consumption. Please pardon errors found, if any.
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I feel the dark in your words. Good for you.
I upvote and followed you, so please give me feedback at my day 3 poetry:
The Everything About Loving
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wow thanks alot for the comment, i will definitely check your post out.
You've captured some dark imagery well. The fear and sense of danger, and the repetitive mention of that point. Works well.
thanks for this comment.
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You made an amazing content and incredible poetry @jacobite. We sould connect and support each other by follow each other. I already upvoted you and following you, please think about that. My apologize if I sent this post to you already. Thanks and greeting from @chanthasam
thank a bunch @chanthasam,
I will definitely watch out for your blog.
I like how you use the sky and the day of whether it's cloudy or not as a symbolic tool to express Danger. I also like how you use repetition in the poemOh, and how you structure your stanzas and break your lines it gives the poem of very good visual appeal.
lovely feedback @acousticsteveo, i really appreciated this