A Failed Fairytale - Fiction and Haiku Combined
This was the boys Point of view on the story which @valerie15 and I @memeitbaby collaborated.
Holding lots of webs and dusts
Castle for myself
I lived in the central part of the town, where trading and stores are all around. In a small house, I live with my sickly old man and Patrice, my little sister. I have survived all these years with the company of my timeworn bow and arrows. To live a life belonging to the low classmen is not as easy as pie. Expenses and medications are rising and I can’t seem to cater all our family’s needs.
I am this family’s breadwinner and I have to juggle two works at a time. Now, I have to go back to hunting since father is not well. Most of the time, exhaustion gets the best of me but seeing my father and sister happy, a little sacrifice is fine with me.
Saw her in the town plaza
As white as the snow
A hot sunny day, I decided to make a garden on the back of our house because my sister is fond of beautiful flowers. Whenever she smiles, it makes my day. When I was making our garden with my little sister, a large crowd gathered in the center plaza while a big carriage stops which revealed the alluring princess, white as snow and her maid, Aria, by her side. She is like a dream to me. So real yet at the same time, so impossible. I don’t want to get my hopes up but our current situation makes even talking to her a futile one.
The Princess has an exquisite beauty, one that no man can ever resist but I am fully aware of my status. I don’t have plans on pursuing her but her smile took me away. It smile took my breath away. I saw her looking back at me, our both eyes met.I’ve seen her eyes that full of joy and longing.
I've felt love for the first time, but even I myself, knows the gap between me and her. It is undeniable that we are heaven and earth but still, the look in her eyes makes me do everything to have her heart.
She has catched my heart off-guard
Anything for her
I wanted her to notice me more. However, I am having doubts with myself.Fear is such an unwanted enemy. We are worlds apart and even a single chance, I believe I do not have. If I can’t be the man for her, I want to be the person who wants to take away the sadness in her eyes.
She smiled and waved at the people. This made me fall head over heels for her. The sweet smile,her kindness and the happiness she brings. I was talking to myself without noticing Patrice listening to words as well. She hugged me and patted me in the back and said.
Go for it brother, status are nothing for true love
Then I said
Where did you learn that?
She answered,
From the book you're reading
I laugh a bit then smiled and hugged her.
Gave all my heart and myself
Wished she accepts it
Her smile is still on my mind even days has already passed. I prepared my sweet little companions for my hunting trip today. I have also forgotten father’s duties to the King. We have to send him a deer once in a month.
Damn it, I missed that buck. It could have been the best offering to the King.
I tried setting up another trap but I have to find the best location. I pretty much grow up in this forest. So, I know where to go.
Someone was sitting beside the river. A woman so enchanting. I realized that it was the princess whom i was in love with. She looked at me; she's just staring so I’ve decided to say something.
I am sorry for interrupting your solitude, Your Highness. I was just hunting food to offer to the King.
I said in a high-pitched and nervous manner. Way to go in impressing the princess. Damn. She felt relieved hearing my answers.
I wanted to leave the soonest because I am afraid to embarrass myself more. But the want to be with her even for one more second I stronger. After that I’ve stayed a couple of hours with the princess. The time with her was so beautiful and romantic.I’ve seen her beautiful smile once again we've talked about my sister and my jobs and a lot of other things. It was a comfortable experience. She listens to me. The Princess actually talked to me.
I could not help but to dance my way back to my little haven. I actually talked to the princess. My princess.
Warned to be executed
Left my love in pain
My days are now a little brighter. I am happier. I feel like I am losing my mind knowing that I was given the chance to know the princess more than what she allows to show in public. We have our secret little moments and these moments are forever to keep.
I could not even express how happy I am with the thought of meeting her tomorrow other at the palace garden. My excitement was easily ruined when I received a message from the palace.
"Dear Sir Hunter,
My little princess shouldn't be with a hunter; didn't you know the difference of your status and her? Can you give hera nice bed to sleep on or a nice house to live in? If not then please leave her immediately.
I am asking nicely for your cooperation but if you still insist to continue, a death punishment for you and your entire family shall happen.
-The King"
Then i remembered the things that bothered me when Isaw the princess in the plaza. Her status, her fame, her lifestyle and her beautiful future, it will be all gone because of me a simple hunter. But if she marries a prince a future will be assured for her so maybe the king is right, it will be good for her. And all i want is to make her happy.
Cried until the tears dry off
Left without a trace
At the garden of the palace, we have talked quite a bit about us. Deep within me, I felt so hopeless. I wanted to stay here forever with her but I have an obligation to my family and to the entire Kingdom. I have to do what will make the Princess happy.
I was able to remove the sadness in her eyes. I could not dare to be the reason for it to show again. I have to do the right thing. Tonight, I am going to make this the best night we both shared. I will be selfish tonight because this is the only chance I have.
I will let forever punish me on internal misery but tonight, I want to be happy. I kissed her in the forehead as a sign of my respect to her. I kissed her once again but since this one is a different kiss, I kissed her in the lips as a sign of my love. I controlled myself not to cry in front of her. I do not want to give her any idea of what is happening. Tonight is my goodbye. Pain and sadness is all I’ve felt as I give her my farewell kiss.
Before I left the castle I slipped a letter to a guards’post. Then I will be gone completely with no trace.
This is not cowardice, this is actually life. Because most often than not, in life, you have to choose your battle. It is true that the princess will be the first and last girl that will ever make me feel happy and complete and I am willing to pay the price for my stupidity. I will face forever with a broken heart and miserable life as long as my Princess would not be dragged with my misery.
I was not afraid to get killed. I could actually send my blood when it is for her. But what difference does it make? I will fight the whole kingdom, we will be happily in love together but she does not deserve the life I can only give her. She deserves the best things in this world. I love her. I love her so much that I can’t even breathe thinking that the steps I am taking are steps away from her. But, this isn’t fairytale. This is just life messed up by destiny’s game.
This is written in collaboration with @valerie15. If you want to read the point of view of the girl in the story, kindly go to his page.
Wow! Eto pala ang pinagkaabalahan ni bunso at ate Val! Well done you too! Now I have to read the other part. Dapat natutulog n ko eh. Haha!
HAHAHAHA salamat po mastur bait mo po 😂😂
Finished reading both. Magandang malungkot! Dugtungan nyo pa. Gawin nyong happy ending 😥
P.S. Di ako mabait. Makulit ka lang! 😂
(Phew .. buti di nya napansin 😂) hahaha
hahaha kala mo lang yun... di nya na lang nasabi... :')
Salamat @guri-gure! Hahaha sus, ikaw na sana pinaka favorite ko sa lahat, nki uso ka lang sa "ate" nilang tawag sa kin. Omoooo!! Hahaha!
Oh my... My apologies tita! Hahaha. Joke lng Val! Peace! ✌
Hahahaha!!
Super 🤓
Thank you moonleestem ^^
I've read the two parts. Awesome idea bro. Who thought of this? haha. bigyan ng jacket!
This is a beautiful story further elevated by the poems snuggly fit in each narrative beat. More collabs please :)
Haha .. thanks :D it's ate vals idea :D kasi nag send sya ng haiku nya tas nireplyan ko ung haiku na sinend nya :D
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Entertaining, well structured, well written and enlightening. Its simply awesome! Weldone
Thanks for the nice comment ^^ well did you read the POV of the princess ? it's not a full story if you just read my work only :) check out the other post :)
here's the link:
https://steemit.com/fiction/@valerie15/a-failed-fairytale-fiction-and-haiku-combined
This was beautiful. I do not know how to write a haiku yet. Lol. The story, the pictures, the poem perfect.
thanks :) haiku is a lovely branch of poetry .. it'll be great if there would be a lot of haiku writers ^_^ well try to learn it .. go to @dbooster he has a post about haikus ^^ ill be looking forward for you haiku
Lovely fairy tale feel to this @memeitbaby. Great Haiku and story accompaniment :-)
I've been waiting for this piece!! I want more collaboration between you and Val!
Both of you are great writers.
Great collab, guys. Mas nauna ko lang nabasa yung sayo Bunso, pero astig. Since magkaibang perspective sya, okay lang kahit kanino ang mauna. Ang lungkot nga lang ng ending... napa-HAI-na-KU na lang ako haha
You got a 10.07% upvote from @bid4joy courtesy of @memeitbaby!