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RE: The Ostrich and the Lion, Poetry and Digital Art
I LOVE this poem! This is my favorite poem that you've written.
I actually went back and deconstructed what you'd done. Almost-rhymes. That's what causes the effect. The words are just close enough that they tantalize you with the expectation of rhyme ... but damn it, they don't!
In the first two stanzas, it's assonance talking. But the last three ...
For you non-poets, this is harder to pull off than it looks.
Clever.
Thank you, Quill. This was a really fun one to write and you know how I like to turn things on their heads. Be anything but predictable or something like that:):):)
@prydefoltz,
Pryde, you are nothing if not unpredictable.
To be honest, I'm still amazed you managed to pull this off. I've re-read the poem a dozen times. Those words ought not work together. I think there's actually something rather sadistic about what you're doing here. If there was someone I could report this to, I would. It's like teasing a tiger with a pork-chop. Not nice. :-)
Left scratching my head.
BTW: My daughter and her friends have been checking in on my feed periodically. Do you know what they are calling me now?
Quill.
There was a boy named Fire
He grew ever lonely and thinner
No one ever called to him to play
And his mother, never to dinner
@prydefoltz,
Laughing my ass off! :-) :-) :-)
Now I'm hungry. Ice cream. I need to make up for lost time.
LOL ... fire doesn't have the same ring:)
Although ... fire does cause a stir.