FREEDOM IN SIXTY-FOUR BARS (An Original Poem)

in #story8 years ago (edited)

5:30AM wake up, shower,
coffee, buttered toast, and
So What? flowing from the radio

its call and response,
like smoke, coaxes me softly
to some other kind of consciousness

a strange feeling settles
at two minutes thirty-three,
reality? It’s just some charlatan
“you’ve been a harlot, son.”
the notes say, “You’ve sold
your best years for a song.”

By three minutes twenty-six
Miles had me transfixed,
I was living 2/7ths of a life,
struggling through the mires
of a Monday to Friday strife
for such a small slice

it’s taken quite a long time
but who am I to whine?
I’ve found a few moments of
freedom in sixty-four bars.


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Enjoyed the double antendre... he was a ponderous barge of a man, floating sand bar to sand bar.

I want to see the newest biopic of him. I heard he was a horribly difficult person to deal with.

I think this is one of your best poems. Very lyrical, and it has a lot of jazz in the rhythm of it. Nicely done.

Agreed, @steemgoblin. It was such fun to read! Bravo, Eric.

Thank you, @steemgolbin and @fairytalelife. This is one of my newer poems. There's something about that song, "So What?" that has a way of taking you to another place. I stream it after work while I'm making dinner quite a bit, especially after a trying day.

Good job! Thank you.

Superb! <3 Best wishes to you @ericvancewalton! <3

I appreciate it, @robyneggs! : )

Very different from your usual work

Yes, my newer pieces are tending to be in this vein. I hope you enjoyed it.

I did it, but its 2 different styles. The older one is somewhat more professional i would say, but this is more emotional

I might be getting a bit lazy mid-career. : )

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