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RE: Short Story: Smugglers in Second Class
Sorry, I read (quickly) through the following
Originally posted on Cosmic Background on 2946-06-12
and automatically assumed the 12 was the year.
My mistake
Maybe what I called mistakes in the text should just be called 'awkward' for reading. For instance:
opened for her Faye just as it would for Junia herself.
the word Faye is not needed or else the word 'her' should be removed?
Oh, you're definitely correct in that instance. I'll fix that one, good catch.
I did a general pass through this story after your first comment as well; I fixed a few other things at that time.