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RE: WINNiNG ATTITUDE #3

in #life7 years ago (edited)

Nice job with this article, @bait002! I like how you took a comment from yesterday's article, and used it to explain your idea in more detail.

Here are a few suggestions for English language improvement of your text.

Passion leaves you with the difficult of getting it done or die while trying to. Passion is what keeps active on your desk when everyone else
goes off to bed.

  • Passion leaves you with the desire to get it done, or die while trying. Passion is what keeps you active at your desk when everyone else goes off to bed.

Ypir role in the scheme

  • Your role in the scheme

Our resolve on what we have settled for creates on our a push that we leave no room for mistakes.

  • Our resolve towards what we have decided upon creates within us a drive that we leave no room for mistakes.

Yup! Guys, i hope

  • Yup! Guys, I hope

As always, these are just suggestions, and there may be other ways to say what you are trying to say. Hopefully you will look up some of these words I have suggested, and understand from the definitions why these words are better choices.

Great job with this article! Keep it up! I have upvoted and resteemed this post as my daily post promotion for people whom I have previously curated.
Cheers!
@mitneb

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Thanks I have made the corrections

Good man, @bait002!
Cheers!
@mitneb