Steemit open mic week #62 - Try again - Original song

in #openmic6 years ago

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Hello steemit!

This is my entry for this weeks open mic.

This is an Original song I wrote for the Open mic songwriters challenge week #2
I just finished it yesterday so I apologize for looking off camera so often haha,
I had to have the lyrics on screen so I wouldn't botch them as much!!!


Here are the Lyrics:

-Try again-

I'm tossing and turning on my bed
the day is gone and I've lost it once again
I feel the concern wash over me
It seems that I'll never get to see
beyond the horizon ever-present....

It's such a shame...
It's such a shame...
It's such a shame...

The seconds, the hours
that I have lost and found
revealing, deceiving
when no one else is around.

When morning comes I fall on my knees
the day that's gone,
the brand new the day that now begins
I look at my hands, try to make sure
I'll do some things different from before
I leave all this guilt behind and tell myself....

I'll try again
I'll try again
I'll try again ...

The seconds, the hours
that I have lost and found
revealing, deceiving
when no one else is around.

The seconds, the hours
that I have lost and found
uncover my weakness
now that I know, I can't run.

The end of the line
tomorrow has come
and maybe this time
I won't lose control...

The end of the line
tomorrow has come
It tears me apart...

The seconds, the hours
that I have lost and found....


This time around I added some reverb to the whole thing so it sounded a little better.

I must say, having to write and perform a brand new song in five days is a real challenge,
but it's one that I'm enjoying immensely!

Thank you @meno and @luzcypher an @pfunk for the motivation!
and everyone that commented and upvoted my first entry!!!!!!!!!!!

I'm usually a perfectionist, but having to do this so quickly is forcing me to let go and use the best take that I have,
it feels weird! but I like it hehe :P

I hope you enjoy it!!!!

P.S.
I've been thinking about doing more regular posts, about music, singing, some production stuff, some band stuff. some life stuff....

But I'd really love your input, what kind of posts would you guys like to see?
This is something I've been wanting to do for a long time and it feels like this is the best way to start!

Any ways, thank you for reading me, and for your eyeball and ear hole time :D

If you enjoyed, please remember to upvote and comment!

Till my next post!

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vamoss luchooo

:) Gracias Juli!!!!

The luch , the luch , the luch is on fire , muy buen tema! comparto , podrias hacer un pequeño tutorial del gear que usas para tus entrys de open mic , se que a mucha gente podría interesarle.

Graciaaaaaaas!!!
Es una gran Idea esaaa!!!
Voy a hacer eso!

really nice to hear you here my friend. thanks for performing this original piece for us. i love your voice really solid work here . fan now

Hey @luisferchav. Nice singing! You made it on my Official Judge's Top list for week 62. Read my full review here

https://steemit.com/openmic/@verbal-d/steemit-s-official-open-mic-judge-verbal-d-s-top-5-entries-for-week-62-original-blog

Hey @verbal-d, I found your post yesterday by chance, I saw it on my feed and clicked on it, and what do you know, I was In your top 5! Haha, that was a nice surprise! Thank you so much!

Haha that is a cool way to discover what I had shared to the community. God works in mysterious ways.
You are most welcome bro. You are powering through these contests!

Well done brother, good song writing skills and use of your vocal range.

Hey @jaybird! Thank you so much! :)

WOW dude, this song is the truth! AWESOME songwriting & beautiful chords...but the meaning is everything. Keep it coming.

Hey @jamaris Thank you so much for the kind words! I love that you connected with meaning! You can bet I'll keep it coming! In fact I'll be uploading my new entry today, I hope you enjoy it as well! :D

so good bro :) masterful vocals once more!

Thank you so much :) :) :)

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