{ORIGINAL POETRY} UNTIL YOU LIFT ME UP AGAIN

in #poetry7 years ago (edited)

My heart is Heavier than the Zuma Rock in Niger
My heavy heart is made of stones
And my minds eyes failed to see clearly

My very spirit has been smashed in thousand pieces
My Own days has been extinguished
Yet I am nothing on my own without YOU Jehovah

My very soul has spanked me in disarray
The coldest night has swept my shivers to the most calmest side of my tender heart
Suddenly My sweet melodious voice shutters in despair
My rosy eyes has grown dimmer Nights and its alley has concealed my day in disdain

And Right in the memory of my thoughts I wonder if I should Laugh or Grief
I laughed in grief and smiled in the pool of my tears I almost got drowned
In my Loudest voice I called out "Please Take this cup away from me!" but you turned a deaf ear

Now am riding in a speedy horse of oblivion and I truly wish you would surely bring me up to speed
As bells rang in arrays of rhymes Hands touching across distance and time
Though I know my cries won't go unheard but am left on my knees
And I won't get up on bended knees until you forgive, forget and let go.
Until you lift me up again

By
Darlington Lloyd Adimoha (Darlingcashflows)
(UNTIL YOU LIFT ME UP AGAIN)

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Thanks Vickylove for your comment. Its well appreciated. Are you a poet?

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