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RE: Waking up with coma lag - Chapter 1 (sci-fi/thriller) (original content)
Really liked it - the idea of waking up from a coma to find out that you're rich, but then also being vulnerable because of that has loads of potential.
If you'd like some criticism then: the single best bit of writing advice is probably "show, don't tell". If you have an interesting world to wake up to, then there are probably more interesting ways to show how the world has changed than just having a character describe it. So, for example, the importance of AI bots could be hinted at by the character being nursed by an AI bot, and getting confused about what's happening.
I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes in the future.
Thanks! I'm really new to writing, I feel like my imagination is okay but putting it down to words is really difficult and takes a lot of time. Plus English is my 3rd language so that is a handicap on its own. Hopefully it will only get better over time!
Thanks for your input. :)
You're welcome! It's pretty amazing to be able to write creatively in a second or third language. One of my favourite authors is Vladimir Nabokov - his third language was English, and he wrote the kind of sentences that just knock you back and think "Whoah, how did he do that?".