Ohhh I like that too - perhaps it worth a revisiting in the future - that's the thing with writing these for writingprompts initially is that they don't usually have much of a life outside the initial post, and you're absolutrly right that they are often very imperfect, even in the context of simple flash fiction. Sometimes I go back and rework things - this was turned into a first person, creepypasta type thing for r/nosleep for instance, but other times, most times, they just linger in their particular state of imperfect unfinishedness.