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RE: A Sneak Peek

in #story8 years ago

This is a nice start. You need to focus a bit on your tenses, as it switches back and forth a bit.
It would also be good to explore her feelings some more, and add some more description of the forest, to make it seem more threatening.
But as a synopsis for that start of the story I think you have done a good job ;-)

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