I'm going to vote for @gaby-crb's story. It is well-organized. Cleanly edited. It had a vision, which it realized from beginning to end without losing the thread. For me, these are important criteria in any form of writing. Plus, as I explained to @gaby-crb in my comment, she displayed a certain art, in foreshadowing the events (the bell tolls; light at the end of the tunnel). This is a tale of penance and redemption. And it is, at the same time, entertaining. I found myself wanting to discover how the story would end for this character.
What more could I want in a story?