CineAtlas 60 | Week 6 - Community Remake | Saptrishi Park / Modipuram]

in Traveling Steem2 days ago (edited)

To achieve a similar feel, I started by matching the area and emotion, then translated it into camera language, although the location is similar but with a different object and story structure. I visited Saptrishi Park, Phase-1 Pallavpuram, Modipuram, India, another park I often visit, as it has a walking path and a library besides the office of the senior citizens, of which I am a member.


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In Week-4 the theme of the contest allowed

Close-ups
Camera movement
Framing
Light and shadow
Silence or ambient sound
Music
Human interaction with the object


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In practice, I tried to build the same mood with almost the same lighting and composition but different sound and the location in the scene because this clip is not shot where the original video was shot in this clip by This Clip in week-4 by @ripon0630

I tried to make the object feel like a character:

To show the pair as a living character, my story is narrated by the pair of shoes itself. I have tried to capture the mood of this pair of abandoned shoes and to define its core feeling, the lonely, tense, nostalgic, hopeless uneasiness.


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I am lying here in this park, near this round cemented stage. I once belonged to this cruel man who loved morning walks. Every day, he slipped me onto his feet, and we went together for a walk in this park paths.

We sat under trees and past benches and laughed as the sun rose. I was a pair of walking shoes, made for comfort, made for miles, and I was proud to carry him.

The pair further says, "I understand today; the time has changed me." My sole grew thin, my cushion flattened, and my fabric tore at the sides. I could feel it before he said a word.

I was no longer useful to him. This morning, he stood in the park, looked at me, and left me here where you are watching me lying helplessly. He walked away on his bike in socks without even giving me a second look, as if I had never been with him.

I did not move but I could see the park was full of life. I can hear birds, people pass by on the path. The grass moving in the wind. Yet I stay where I am, abandoned but still remembering every step I had carried, every mile I had survived with this selfish guy.

You see, he has thrown me, but I am not entirely worthless. I am still holding hope inside me. Maybe a ragpicker will come and take me away, or I will be the help of a poorer guy in the near future.

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In my micro-film, I captured the entire video, keeping the pair of shoes as the main character. I started with a wide shot as in the original clip, including the background. I moved my camera closer and farther to show the moods and shades of the pair.

Description

I choose this object:

For my micro-film, I chose this pair of shoes in a park where I go to bring reality and also because I believe this garden is the most suitable place for this abandoned pair of shoes.


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Why this object?

The location for my film is a park where I often go, first I left this pair of shoes near this round-shaped stage where I often sit. This is a pair of shoes, which once used to be bright, now look different, which creates a contrast of moods.

I wanted to show the pair of shoes in a desperate mood, which matches the contest's demand and shows the character of my story that makes it stand out in this park.

Then I put them on and left them near this bench.

This location fits the object:

It looks like the right place where it used to walk and this park is close to my place, has Google location, and therefore is easy to PIN on Steem Atlas.


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The story, feeling, and message I wanted to express :

Through this pair of shoes, I wanted to show as if the shoe were expressing his feelings in his own words,

I remain here, quietly gathering dust beside the path, while the world keeps moving on. I was only a pair of shoes, but I am no longer needed. A pair of shoes may be left behind, but the miles it held, the memories it touched, and the love it carried don't disappear so easily.

Comments

Comment-1 @enrisanti
Comment-2 @kibreay001
Comment-3 @toufiq777


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Saptrishi Park3P35+8XC, Pallavpuram, India 250110
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Steem Atlas PIN//:# (!steematlas 29.05342488 lat 77.70966232 long Saptrishi Park, Pallavpuram, India 250110 d3scr)

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I invite @mahadisalim @josepha and @suboohi to take part.

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 14 hours ago (edited)

A wonderful entry. I too would like to inspire myself from a post about a central character. You were inspired by @ripon0630's post, which featured a pomegranate as the central character. You have created a creative video in a different way, presenting a shoe as the central character of the same passion. A very elegant video. Best wishes to you.

Hola, amigo.

  1. Tu publicación cumple con la regla de tomar como modelo a la publicación de otro usuario de un concurso anterior. Tu elección fue la del objeto-personaje de @ripon0630.
  2. Mi momento favorito es el que está en 00:44, cuando el par de zapatos dice: "Estoy muy triste". Esto me hace recordar cuando uno se aleja por un tiempo o para siempre de una mascota.
  3. El remake es muy original en el sentido de que hace que objetos inanimados tengan sentimientos y piensen como personas.
  4. Quizás hizo falta una toma con un ángulo más bajo.

Excelente trabajo. Todo lindo. Saludos cordiales.

 23 hours ago 

Thanks for your feedback and suggestion!


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 3 hours ago 

Evaluation — CineAtlas 60 (Week 6: Community Remake)

Post: @dove11 — "CineAtlas 60 | Week 6 - Community Remake | Saptrishi Park / Modipuram]"


Evaluation Summary (Week 6)

Criteria (Rubric /10)ScoreShort Comments
1) Weekly rule respected (Community Remake + 20–60 sec + required links) / 32.9 / 3.0All main required elements are present. The inspired participant is clearly named, the remake source is explained, and both video links are included.
2) Originality of reinterpretation / 22.0 / 2.0Outstanding reinterpretation. The post takes inspiration from @ripon0630’s object-as-character idea and transforms it into a new, original story built around abandoned shoes.
3) Story clarity and creativity / 21.9 / 2.0Very strong storytelling. The shoes are given voice, memory, and emotion, which makes the remake personal, cinematic, and memorable.
4) Video execution (framing, rhythm, visual control) / 10.9 / 1.0The visual structure appears well controlled, with wide shots, closer framing, and a clear mood throughout.
5) SteemAtlas pin quality (relevant description + correct location) / 11.0 / 1.0The pin is present with clear map details, and the location is well connected to the remake idea.
6) Engagement (Shot Breakdown comments on others) / 10.9 / 1.0Three comment links are included, exceeding the minimum requirement.

Final Score: 9.6 / 10


General Comment

An excellent Week 6 entry. The remake is clear, original, and emotionally rich, turning @ripon0630’s object-as-character inspiration into a new story with its own voice and identity. The abandoned shoes become a convincing cinematic character, and the post combines strong interpretation, good structure, and very effective presentation.

 2 days ago 

Wow, you have written and shared a very wonderful competition post with us today. You have made a very beautiful video of a pair of shoes placed under the open sky. The two black shoes on the green grass looked very amazing. I liked the video very much. Overall, thank you very much for sharing a wonderful post.

 23 hours ago 

Thank you, looking forward to your post!

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 2 days ago 
 14 hours ago 

You have shared a very beautiful post. I really like the way you shared with us about such a wonderful park. I really like the way you shared this beautiful post with us. I really like the way you shared such a wonderful moment in this last week. Thank you very much.

 10 hours ago 

Thanks for your feed back and great observation!

You have created something unique which I have gotten inspired by your post and making use of your ideas. Wishing you good luck

 10 hours ago 

Thanks for your kind words. I hope you are going to present something great if I inspired you.

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