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RE: REDUCE EYES STRAIN WITH REDMOON

in #utopian-io5 years ago

Hello, @cuteflames!

Thank you for this detailed review. It is true that staring at a screen for a long time reduces the concentration of melatonin naturally produced in your system, so I do understand the need for such an application. I appreciate the information you have provided us with.

On the content side, I like all the information provided. The post contains valuable information about the project itself, as well as your personal views and thoughts, and I think that you did a really good job of highlighting the key features of the application. I also appreciate the fact that you went the extra mile and provided an extensive comparison with Eye Care, and it goes without saying that I enjoyed reading your work.

However, the post did have minor issues of style and proofreading, and I will cite a few examples:

The first time I used it, I noticed I no longer have teary eyes.

This sentence should read: "The first time I used it, I noticed I no longer had teary eyes."

In comparison, Eye care has over 32 color shades with which it’s intensity can be varied.

This one should read: "In comparison, Eye care has over 32 color shades with which its intensity can be varied."

To summarize, this is a very interesting review, but also one that would have benefited from another round of proofreading. I look forward to your next one.

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Thank you for your review, @lordneroo! Keep up the good work!