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RE: Ahe’ey - Royal Orphans (An Original Novel - Part 5)
You can get an insight into the people of Ahe'ey in parts one and three. You may find some clues there. I would tell you more, but then I would have to... you know... ;) J.
I liked how you handled this...
“Luna is within you, Bas. Can’t you feel her?” Gabriel placed his hand on the shoulder of his young cousin. A tiny veil of mournful water covered the blue eyes of the youngest boy.
You didn't say 'Gabriel said as he placed his hand on the shoulder of his young cousin....' like you did in a couple of previous cases. It's actually clear that Gabriel was speaking. With this technique you achieve much more economy and it allows you to show more action that surrounds the dialog.
Respect.
Thanks