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RE: I Almost Drowned, and I Didn't Tell My Family

in #writing7 years ago

Wow, what a story. I'm a crappy swimmer, I mean, I've been close to that a couple times, in a pool, so...Great! You had me right to the end. A couple of things, first, your formatting. A lot of long paragraphs, you might consider breaking them up, dropping in some single, italicized lines. Second, no link to dolphinschool. If you'd like to add a link at the end, I'll consider it for revenue share tonight. Otherwise, excellent job, scary story and yeah, I'm from Oklahoma, so we go to the gulfcoast every couple of years and it's not the same swimming in the ocean as it is anywhere else, for sure. Thanks for sharing this. Great story, really! 25 views and 9 votes so far!

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Thanks man. Can you recheck and see if I did the end correctly? I'm not at home right now, so it's a little difficult on the mobile. :)

Great! thanks!

Woah. I got a big upvote on this.

Or rather, a TON of upvotes! I'm up to 70. Thank you!

MAN! That is awesome! Well, I guess my plan is working. LOL