Steemit Challenge - Season 28 Week-4 : Hidden Truth Unveiled

in #writing-s28wk410 days ago (edited)

Hello writers, let's get straight into the story..

The story is about Timothy, a garage owner in a famous historic town with a centuries-old castle. One evening, he hears a mysterious story from a man named Tare. It would be wrong to call it a story, but Timothy hears it as a true story. Tony is a man who lives next door to Timothy. It is also good to know that he is a regular customer of Timothy.

However, Tony is a senior citizen. Tony is always out and about and tries to be more attractive to people. The two of them were talking one day when Tony spoke to Timothy in a low, serious voice about a hidden treasure buried under the castle. It was a kind of mystery that had mysteriously disappeared decades ago.

Maybe Tony had known about it a long time ago, but after the mutual depth between the two of them, Tony remembered this story again. However, how that story mysteriously disappeared decades ago is unknown to everyone. Timothy was interested in knowing the reality, so Timothy told these things to Police Officer David.

Police officer David is Timothy's regular customer because David brings his (police car) to the garage for regular servicing. A police car is that will not perform well if it is not serviced regularly. Then David searches the police archives and discovers reports related to the castle. Which was their secret mission.

Meanwhile, Timothy used to travel through the underground passages of the castle with David every night. They would think deeply about something in their minds. This is how their secret mission was going on. However, one night they found a secret entrance through a pile of garbage. The two of them entered with a flashlight and discovered a labyrinth of tunnels.

When they discovered the labyrinth, at the end of the labyrinth was an old wooden box filled with old things and a faded diary that revealed the truth. I was very excited to know the truth but finally they found out that it was the plan of a corrupt city official. Long ago, there was an official who was in charge of a corrupt city. I don't know if that man is still alive, but he was in charge of that treasure.

1000051422.jpgSource

  • Now I find it interesting that where is the person who was in charge of the treasure or what is his identity? Is he even alive? Or did he die while searching for the treasure?

  • If we want to know about the old man named Tony here, it seems that the old man was very eager to find the treasure. But Tony was looking for a trustworthy person who could directly search for the treasure. For this, the garage guy named Timothy was perfect. But Timothy, out of emotion or excitement, told a police officer about this treasure. Maybe that police officer was a witness to the mysterious disappearance of the treasure a few decades ago.

  • At one point, when Timothy couldn't trust anyone, Timothy found a wooden box at the end of the tunnel and opened it. There were many things there, among which he found a picture that was surprising. In the picture, Timothy could clearly see some violent people attacking the old man named Tony. Ooooooo, it's so tragic?? There was another diary there that had a treasure map in the diary. But the most surprising thing was that in the picture of Tony in the old box, Timothy saw Tony's finger cut off.

  • This time Timothy was directly checking Tony's finger. This time Timothy saw that Tony had an artificial finger attached to his hand, which is usually attached when a finger is amputated. So is Tony the corrupt city official?? Because a few decades ago Tony was young and now Tony is old. But why did Tony not want to search for the treasure later? Why did Tony tell Timothy about the treasure? Then Timothy forcefully learned from Tony that Tony had found the treasure but had resorted to death while trying to retrieve it. That's why the main door of the treasure was so scary that he couldn't reach the end. The story ended here.

Thanks @dove11 organising such a beautiful topics.

So I am Inviting my lovely Steemian friends @kouba01, @suboohi, @heriadi,@wilmer1988, @selina1, @memamun, @sushanta83, @jimiaera02, @solaymann to Participate in this Competition.

Sort:  

20251021_095317.jpg

Week-4 : Hidden Truth Unveiled

 
Hello @max-pro, thank you so much for taking part in Steemit Challenge Season 28 Week-2. We truly appreciate the time and creativity you put into your entry. Your assessment, including feedback and scores based on our evaluation criteria provided below.

CriteriaMarksRemarks
Story start to finish4.6/5Okay
Originality & Uniqueness3/3Good
Presentation0.8/1Okay
My observation0.8/1Okay
Total9.2/10
FeedbackYou took time for starting your story but there were a couple of contradictory points. Like you have mentioned a person Tare in place of Tony . Also you have narrated your story in first person after a particular point.
Moderated By
@dove11

Thank you for such a wonderful review considering my post in detail.

Thanks 🥰

Mr pro We are coming with a Steem Fun game :)