Steemit Challenge s28wk6: Unexpected Chat's True Twist

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The shopping mall was not just a place of work and responsibility for Tina, but also a place of waiting. Every day, people came to the market in the light of the day, and she stood there in her own way. She dressed, smiled, fulfilled her duties, and continued to work there with attention. However, she had kept it in her heart that this place was a permanent address for her.

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Antony came that day against his will since he did not like crowds at all. And he did not like the hustle and bustle of the shopping mall, but still he could not refuse his mother's request. Standing in front of the store, his eyes suddenly caught sight of Tina. The girl was not very beautiful, but there was such a depth in her eyes that it seemed that she knew how to tolerate many things silently. And that was understandable by looking at the steps of her work.

Antony did not say anything because he understood that he had to get himself together before going to this man. The next day, he went again, not just to see, but with some hope in his heart. Tina did not recognize him at first. When Antony asked the question, Tina realized that this boy was actually different from everyone else, because his words were a bit unusual. But strangely, they were touching Tina's heart.

While leaving, Antony said that it was nice talking to you, Tina could feel that this was the first time that her working time had passed very quickly while talking. After a few days, the topic of coffee came up and Tina nodded her head in agreement. They went to a small camp to have coffee and sat by the window. It was raining outside, the heat of the coffee cup was warming her hands, but the words were a little cold, a little scared, and in a deep voice.

Tina said that I won't stay here for long. Antony didn't ask, because if you already know the answer, it makes it harder to ask. Because he already knew that Tina would leave this city.
Although the days passed, their meetings were less, but their thoughts were more. Tina was busy with her own plans, while Antony was arranging his future in his own way. No one stopped anyone, yet every time they said goodbye, an unspoken word remained in the air.

One day Tina said that if we had met at a different time, something would have happened differently. Antony came and said that maybe we wouldn't have understood each other.
And this is the summary of this relationship and feelings. Their last meeting was in front of a shopping mall. There was no drama, just the two of them standing. Knowing that one would leave, the other would stay, accepting the struggle to survive in this city.He has no words to hold Tina back, and he doesn't want to force anyone to hold him back. And he wants to keep the cold feeling inside him.

Tina said that you gave me courage, I will never forget that. Antony just said that you made me understand that not all love is meant to be kept, but some love comes to make people grow. Tina left, her heart remained the same as before. But something inside Antony became permanent. A soft pain, which he doesn't want to heal anymore. Because he knows that behind this pain, a very soft, tender, memorable feeling will remain with him for the rest of his life. And this is how their story ended. Thank you everyone.

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Week-6 : Unexpected Chat's True Twist

 
Hello @bristy1, thank you so much for taking part in Steemit Challenge Season 28 Week-6. I truly appreciate the time and creativity you put into your entry. Your assessment, including feedback and scores based on my evaluation criteria is provided below:

CriteriaMarksRemarks
Story start to finish4.7/5Okay
Originality & Uniqueness2.9/3Okay
Presentation0.9/1Okay
My observation0.9/1Okay
Total9.4/10
FeedbackI appreciate your story and the effort but you wavered from the prompt a little too much. If you go through the prompt one more time, you will find that Antony invited Tina for a coffee in the store on his first visit and then they discussed for a long time. Later they met again on the coming weekend and ...from here the story was to take a shape.
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