Steemit Challenge-Season 28 Week-6 : Unexpected Chat's True Twist

in #burnsteem25yesterday (edited)

Let's get straight to the story.

A shy young man, Anthony, meets a salesperson at a clothing store in a shopping mall. After meeting Tina, he finds her very pretty. When Tina goes to a café near the store for a cup of coffee, he surprisingly agrees. The two talk for hours and then a feeling develops between them.

They talk for hours and when Anthony is walking Tina to the parking lot, Tina hesitates. It was amazing... Tina squeezes his hand, but Tina doesn't know if he's emotional or crazy. After squeezing Tina's hand, he says, "Let's have dinner next week." But that's what he asked.

Anthony also says, "I know a place that has the best food." Anthony also says that there's enough space to spend a lot of time there. They hug each other and say goodbye, their hearts imagining great things about the days to come.

  • Let's continue the story now.

1000053343.jpgSource

Antony was romantic in his own way, so he was weak towards Tina. Antony was telling Tina everything he thought, but he did not know that the salesperson (Tina) was a spy police agent. The plan of that police agent was to expose the business secrets of all the illegal businesses in the market. But Tina fell in love with Antony in an instant.

Suddenly, one day, when the two met in that special place, they made a plan between themselves that they would present their truth in front of each other. But this truth is an eternal truth that will only stay in this place and will not go outside. Suddenly, when Antony came to know that Tina was a police spy agent, he was scared. He was afraid of the police. But the surprising thing is that when Tina asked about Antony's past, Antony said, I am a robbery chief.

Antony was telling Tina about his past and he said that I was so violent, In the past, that I used to separate the heads from the bodies of people just for wealth and money. Playing with blood was a kind of addiction for me, Antony was telling the girl.

Antony said that I used to cut off the heads of helpless people and keep them in a secret place. Tina was not scared at all after hearing these stories because Tina was a police agent. Such incidents were completely normal for her. However, when Tina came to know that Antony had accidentally killed one of his own relatives while trying to rob someone, it hurt her heart.

After that, she took a vow in sorrow that the pain of losing a relative was too much, so Tina would not do any more robberies. Now here is the twist. When Tina was telling the truth, Tina put a ring on her hand at that moment, but Tina did not know about it. Then Tina told Antony. The day you accidentally cut off a man's head, I am his daughter!! I saw the scene of my own mother's murder through the window, but I couldn't say anything that day.

Today I have established myself and can judge this murder. That's why I arrested you, but our love is not false. Tina promised Anthony that she would soon get the help of the law to reduce his sentence. The story could have ended here. However, after Anthony was taken to jail, Anthony suddenly disappeared. Later, he returned as a powerful police agent.

So I am inviting my lovely Steemian friends @suboohi, @heriadi,@wilmer1988, @selina1, @memamun, @sushanta83 to participate in this Competition.

Sort:  

20251021_095317.jpg

Week-6 : Unexpected Chat's True Twist

 
Hello @, thank you so much for taking part in Steemit Challenge Season 28 Week-6. I truly appreciate the time and creativity you put into your entry. Your assessment, including feedback and scores based on my evaluation criteria is provided below:

CriteriaMarksRemarks
Story start to finish4.7/5Okay
Originality & Uniqueness3/3Good
Presentation0.9/1Okay
My observation0.9/1Okay
Total9.5/10
FeedbackWow, all facts in your story say that you have an absolutely original story. The only point which confused me, why you changed his name from Antony to Anthony and how he suddenly disappeared to return as a powerful police agent?
Moderated By
@dove11