I like it, particularly the "low, low voices" section. Got the brain moving. You seem to have use it 3 ways! "Even though these low," (as a noun) "low voices do not reach your ears these days" (adjective, volume), but then I also take it as, "even though these low,"(well being)"low"(volume) voices do not reach your ears". I may be off with all of these but thats the best part of poetry for me. The potential for ambiguity allows us to relate more literally.
Very interesting interpretation! :) I really like your thinking. It's brilliant that people like you can find their own meanings in my words. Thank you!