RE: Air-Clinic The first decentralized health care platform on the Steem Blockchain (Episode 1)
This is a very comprehensive post, which details much of what we know about Air-clinic.
There are, however, some areas where I would advise improvement in future posts. You write in the preface that you will be sharing you experience with the platform. But you do very little of that. Most of your experience is limited to the suggestions at the end. I would have liked to see that throughout the post. As it is, this post is mostly a collection of information available elsewhere.
I would also suggest putting more effort into style, grammar, and proofreading. Possibly using a tool such as Hemingway. I would be happy to provide some examples of these issues in a follow-up comment, if you wish.
Finally, why is there such a huge space between the end of the text to the end of the post?
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I saw the large space late and due to the HF20 update, I don't want to waste Mana.
Okay.
I'm usually telling people to add commas, but this is one place where no comma is needed.
Two issues here. First, that's the wrong expression. It's a negative expression, which is not what you were going for. Also, you dropped an "a" in "wait."
Before the "and" here is a good place for a comma. Although I'd really prefer if you split the sentence into two sentences.
This needs a comma after "however." The comma you do have there should be a period.
Not would. Will.
These are the examples from your first paragraph. You can do better than this.
Thank you, would do better
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